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And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« on: September 23, 2014, 01:53:54 PM »
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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2014, 01:23:08 PM »
We will murder whomever we please without provocation or warning. Go ahead, say something!

https://plus.google.com/117303045388933921465/posts/E976cBDu4hR

Please let me know if the above linked article makes any sense at all? I seriously need some feedback right now.
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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #2 on: September 27, 2014, 10:09:59 AM »
Updated. Reviews, questions, suggestions, please?
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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #3 on: September 27, 2014, 10:59:40 AM »
Yeah it seems like a well-written article.. what do you want to feedback on specifically?

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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #4 on: September 27, 2014, 03:02:16 PM »
Thanks  :-* Did you understand it? I mean is there stuff into the mix that doesn't make sense in the context? If so, I need to either compress (prolly a bit, I usually do) and/or better illustrate the connection. Anything that just plain doesn't make sense at all? Any other suggestions?
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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #5 on: September 27, 2014, 03:30:05 PM »

It seemed comprehensible enough at first glance.. I'll have to read through it all and see.

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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2014, 10:59:21 AM »
Overall, it's a good blog entry with a vital message. Thumbs up! It could be a little more concise, maybe, but not if it would cramp your writing style. The highlighted text was a little off-putting to me; at first I thought it might be a glitch, or something. I have not upgraded to G+ and don't intend to. At this point I don't want it for anything but email...but that's just me. And I recognized the background picture (I love that photo; I had saved it a while ago from some page I don't remember.) I had to skip the part about the kid in str8 because I had already read your account of it years ago, and because my brain just can't take it right now. Nice job overall, and I hope some of this feedback is helpful.

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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #7 on: September 28, 2014, 08:10:14 PM »
Yes, thanks.
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Re: And Now A Subliminal Message from The Program
« Reply #10 on: November 01, 2014, 10:15:28 PM »
Well yeah, that's the conclusion. What about the bridge? Where's the bridge? I can't find that confounded bridge!
"Don\'t let the past remind us of what we are not now."
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