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Letter: From parents to Parents
Che Gookin:
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--- Quote from: "Ursus" ---But, maybe I don't quite see how y'all intend to use this... Edumacate me, if you please...
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It goes here and on other website pages where applicable. There will probably be more than one letter so I might put excerpts with a [click here for more] tag.
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Sort of what I was thinking. If you hit someone with a wall o' text I doubt it matters how emotionally pumped up they are. Wall o' text is wall o' text and most folks just won't be bothered.
wdtony:
My thoughts,
I would suggest introducing yourself (parent) and your primary concern to the reader first before going into the writing so the reader knows who you are and what you are attempting to convey. This should fulfill the first two steps taught in sales training: obtaining the attention and interest of the target.
Then I would keep everything as Ursus has laid it out because the personal aspect is important and the content is good. The questions about why certain treatment methods are used is good also.
Then I would include a few paragraphs (at most) on the primary parents page (like iamartsy suggested, keep it short), and then a link to another page as a "read more" kinda thing for the remainder of the writing. (like the gook was saying)
By then you should have the target's desire to read more. After that, it is up to the parent to take action by not placing their child in a program or pulling them out.
iamartsy:
Thanks WDTony. You summed up my point well. That is what I have done on my sites at times. When reading is a difficult task, it is easier. The content is great, and the excerpt to print idea is a good solution. I have sent Psy examples of where I have done this myself. The except opens into a new page with a print link. So you can either read the whole page or print it. It is up to the reader at that point.
Rusty Goat:
Longwinded, filler filled and sounds like something you'd hear while talking on the phone for 4 or 5 hours with someone but you''re too polite to cut them off, :) Maybe it's just that I've experienced that once too often or something, but whatever... it's a Great piece, just way long.
Ursus seems the likely editor though... and maybe pick out like 4 or 5 paragraphs, then "read entire text" link Some sites even charge for full text options. Parents with thousands of dollars to place kids might spend a couple bucks reading compelling parent testimonials... you never know.
RG
wdtony:
--- Quote from: "Rusty Goat" ---Longwinded, filler filled and sounds like something you'd hear while talking on the phone for 4 or 5 hours with someone but you''re too polite to cut them off, :) Maybe it's just that I've experienced that once too often or something, but whatever... it's a Great piece, just way long.
Ursus seems the likely editor though... and maybe pick out like 4 or 5 paragraphs, then "read entire text" link Some sites even charge for full text options. Parents with thousands of dollars to place kids might spend a couple bucks reading compelling parent testimonials... you never know.
RG
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You heard about the Community Group Sponsored Meeting PFC is having in Porter county this month? I don't know who is invited but it looks like it is on public property (libraries are sometimes weird about this). Hopefully it is a meeting about how much money they are losing.
I'm sure you know about it, but in case you don't, here it is:
Pathway Family Center
Event Type: Community Group Sponsored Meeting
Date: 12/15/2008
Start Time: 5:00 PM
End Time: 8:30 PM
Description:Non profit organizational meeting.
Library: Hageman Library
Westchester Public Library - Hageman Library
100 Francis St
Porter, Indiana 46304
United States
Found at:
http://www.wpl.lib.in.us/evanced/lib/ev ... sp?ID=4949
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