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Statement Contest: About a.p.all
Che Gookin:
Keep it simple and to the point. Rusty Goat hits it out well enough. Though it is a shame the word advocate has to be used, but that is merely my general dislike for the word and stubborn refusal to title myself as such.
hurrikayne:
The goat gets my vote as well.
Miss Antsy Pam:
I think the list will be useful for other purposes, but I think we need to make our Mission Statement...simple and concise. I don't want to loose a parent from reading the rest of the content because of the laundry list of things WE ALL oppose.
Let's keep it as simple as possible....we want to "hook them" right away so they will dive into the site for more info...just my 2 cents
~pam
kev (antiWWASP.com):
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--- Quote from: "Rusty Goat" ---here's my doodad for the day... If'n you can use any of it, go right ahead... personally, I think the "about us" should be short and firm but sweet... we can have a separate page for "expert opinions" or something... oh, and a "youtube" page would be completely awesome. That venue has already demonstrated itself to be a great program bashing/hurting tactic. RG
here goes:
Welcome to the AP Alliance website.
The AP Alliance consists of volunteers, parents, members of several national, international, professional advocacy groups and organizations. This group includes a large number of survivors of behavior modification facilities, boarding schools, and other “teen help” programs. They have combined efforts to share their expertise, experience and vast information resources in an easy to find location on the internet. The AP Alliance strives to offer visitors to this site a birds-eye view of the troubled teen industry including specific details, information and overwhelming evidence of a proven abusive and deadly track record in programs throughout the United States and abroad.
Throughout this site you will find out why this industry should be shut down and the people, agencies and businesses that contribute to, operate, and profit from it should be held fully accountable. This includes politicians, law enforcement, educational consultants, and doctors. The AP Alliance knows no boundaries with respect to states or countries.
Please take some time to research our site. Thank you for visiting.
The AP Alliance
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I think i'm leaning towards this as my favorite as a mission statement.
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This is my favorite at this point as well.. Good work Rusty (i know who u are! lol)
Ursus:
I would omit the "welcome" starter and requesting that they take some time and "thank you for visiting" closer. Not necessary, and it implies we're desperate to have them visit. Next thing ya know, we'll be apologizing for offensive content.
I also think we should avoid broadening the net of who is in our gun sights, i.e.: "This includes politicians, law enforcement, educational consultants, and doctors." Hopefully some of those people will be reading our site, and may in fact be able to do some good for the cause. One wouldn't want them thinking that their chosen profession has singled them out for suspicion on Apall, and that they are not welcome.
Other than the above, the meat of this is quite good. My utmost respect to you, Rusty, for putting this together! :notworthy:
I also think psy's example of ISAC's AboutUs is a very good one. Clean, simple, powerful.
Here is my suggestion of an edit, apologies to Rusty if'n I removed a favored portion! My changes (other than new-paragraph insertions) in red:
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The AP Alliance consists of volunteers, parents, and members of several national, international, professional advocacy groups and organizations. This group includes a large number of survivors of behavior modification facilities, "emotional growth" boarding schools, and other "teen help" programs.
They have combined efforts to share their expertise, experience and vast information resources in an interconnected and centralized location on the internet.
The AP Alliance strives to offer visitors to this site a birds-eye view of the troubled teen industry including specific details, information and overwhelming evidence of a proven abusive and deadly track record in programs throughout the United States and abroad.
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